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Write a formal letter of 720-750 words applying for the job

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Dear Mr. /Mrs, I want to apply for a job as a waiter in the store "BandB Milktea and coffee", as I have seen your job advert in the shop's fan pages. I think I'm a perfect candidate for this job as I already have a lot of valuable professional experience and I enjoy working with people. I already have all the necessary skills, and I have always been interested in milk tea and I love to explore about milk tea, so I am ready to provide customers with all the details about milk tea and coffee. . Moreover, I can also speak English fluently. I am a responsible, reliable, hardworking and enthusiastic person. I am always on time. I hope I've proven I'm the best candidate for this job. I would be very grateful if I could come to your door and tell me more about my application. I can come for an interview any time of the week. If my application is successful, I will be able to start working from October 1. I am enclosing my CV. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Trang Nguyen Thi Thuy Trang.
Dear Mr. /Mrs,

I want to apply for a
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as a waiter in the store
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Milktea
and coffee
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, as I have
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seen
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advert in the shop's fan pages.

I
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think
I'm a perfect candidate for this
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job
as I already have
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a lot of
valuable professional experience and I enjoy working with
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people
.
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I
already have all the necessary
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skills
, and I have always
been interested
in milk tea and I
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love
to explore about milk tea,
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so
I am ready to provide customers with all the
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details
about milk tea and coffee.
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Moreover
, I can
also
speak English
fluently
.

I am a responsible, reliable, hardworking and enthusiastic person. I am always on time.

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I
hope I've proven I'm the best candidate for this
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.
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I
would be
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very
grateful if I could
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come
to your door and
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tell
me more about my application.
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I
can
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come
for an interview any time of the week.

If my application is successful, I will be able to
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start
working from October 1. I am enclosing my CV.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter Write a formal letter of 720-750 words applying for the job

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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