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You have recently moved to a different house. Now you would like to notify one of your English-speaking friends that you have moved to a different house. v.3

You have recently moved to a different house. Now you would like to notify one of your English-speaking friends that you have moved to a different house. v. 3
Dear Henry, I know it would come to you as a surprise, but I have finally moved to a new house after living in my previous house for such a long time. Of course, it was not an easy decision for me, given how much I loved that house because of its proximity to a beautiful lake and animal sanctuary, but I needed to move out of it because its owner wanted to renovate it and then sell it to some corporate businesspeople at a very handsome profit. Of course, the new house, which I moved in, is a great place because it is a lot more spacious than my previous house. Besides, the new house is built with some solid wood, which I really like, because it would help the house to keep at a comfortable temperature throughout the entire year.   So, it would mean that I would have to spend a lot less money on the electricity bill to maintain a comfortable temperature at my house unlike the old one. Besides, it is in a nice neighbourhood also. So, come and visit me sometime, possibly next weekend, because I think you would also like my new house. Warm wishes, Patrick
Dear Henry,

I know it would
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come
to you as a surprise,
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but
I have
finally
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moved
to a
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new
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house
after living in my previous
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house
for such a long time.
Of course
, it was not an easy decision for me,
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given
how much I
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loved
that
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house
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because
of its proximity to a
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beautiful
lake and animal sanctuary,
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but
I needed to
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move
out of it
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because
its owner wanted to renovate it and then sell it to
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some
corporate businesspeople at a
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very
handsome profit.

Of course
, the
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new
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house
, which I
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moved
in, is a great place
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because
it is a lot more spacious than my previous
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house
.
Besides
, the
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new
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house
is built
with
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some
solid wood, which I
really
like,
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because
it would
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help
the
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house
to
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keep
at a comfortable temperature throughout the entire year.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
 
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So
, it would mean that I would
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have to
spend a lot less money on the electricity bill to maintain a comfortable temperature at my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
unlike the
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old
one.
Besides
, it is in a nice
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neighbourhood
also
.

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So
,
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come
and visit me sometime,
possibly
next
weekend,
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because
I
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think
you would
also
like my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
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house
.

Warm wishes,

Patrick
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently moved to a different house. Now you would like to notify one of your English-speaking friends that you have moved to a different house. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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