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You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v.2

You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v. 2
Dear Uncle Seth, Hope all is well at your end. I know that you are thinking and planning hard to visit a great place for our next family trip, and I have a suggestion for you.   In fact, I am going to recommend a place which I have visited lately. The name of this place is “Cyprus”.   Cyprus is known as the 'Jewel of the Mediterranean' and the legendary birthplace of Aphrodite, the ancient goddess of love and beauty. I think I would never forget about visiting this place because people are just so friendly there. Besides, the cost there is relatively much cheaper than many other European countries.   However, the best thing to do in Cyprus is to enjoy its incredible weather. The summer months there are warm and dry, and perfect for enjoying the island's many beaches. Even in winter, you'll find the weather warm, compared to most parts of Europe. Besides, Cyprus has one of the oldest histories dating as far back as 1100 BC which once hosted successive superpowers including Assyrians, Egyptians, Persians and Romans.   All in all, it is a great place to visit. I believe we will enjoy our time there and thoroughly enjoy our trip. Yours sincerely, John D. Costa
Dear Uncle Seth,

Hope all is well at your
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. I know that you are thinking and planning
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to visit a great
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place
for our
next
family trip, and I have a suggestion for you.
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In fact, I am going to recommend a
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place
which I have visited lately.

The name of this
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place
is “Cyprus”.
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Cyprus
is known
as the 'Jewel of the Mediterranean' and the legendary birthplace of Aphrodite, the ancient goddess of
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love
and beauty. I
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think
I would never forget about visiting this
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place
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because
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people
are
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just
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so
friendly there.

Besides
, the cost there is
relatively
much cheaper than
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many
other European countries.
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However
, the best thing to do in Cyprus is to enjoy its incredible weather. The summer months there are warm and dry, and perfect for enjoying the island's
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many
beaches. Even in winter, you'll find the weather warm, compared to most parts of Europe.
Besides
, Cyprus has one of the oldest histories dating as far back as 1100 BC which once hosted successive superpowers including Assyrians, Egyptians, Persians and Romans.
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All in all, it is a great
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place
to visit.

I believe we will enjoy our time there and
thoroughly
enjoy our trip.

Yours
sincerely
,

John D. Costa
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IELTS letter You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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