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You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v.1

You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v. 1
Dear Wallner, Hope you and aunt Alecia are doing great. It was delightful news that we will soon have a family trip together and you are in charge to finalise the arrangements. I am so excited about the upcoming holiday and looking forward to spending some great time with all of you. I have lately been to Vienna, the capital city of Austria, and had a great experience. I think this would be a wonderful destination for us to enjoy our holiday together. Viena is regarded as the City of Music because of its musical legacy and the historic centre of Vienna is rich in architectural ensembles, grand buildings, monuments and parks. Plenty of spectacular cultures is within easy reach in this city and I wish to be there again and witness a city revered by all. We can enjoy the music film festival on City Hall Square, stroll and taste food in a magical surrounding, visit the Schönbrunn Zoo, the oldest zoo in the world, take a tour to the Ringstrasse by a tram, do some shopping and be in a city which is considered one of the best livable cities in the world. I had been there only for a couple of days and my experience was fabulous. I am quite positive all of us will enjoy our time in this city during our trip. Would like to know your thoughts about it. Take care and stay fine. See you soon. Yours truly, Powell
Dear
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Wallner
,

Hope you and aunt
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Alecia
are doing great. It was delightful news that we will
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soon
have a family trip together and you are in charge to
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finalise
the arrangements. I am
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so
excited about the upcoming holiday and looking forward to spending
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some
great time with all of you.

I have lately been to Vienna, the capital city of Austria, and had a great experience.
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I
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think
this would be a wonderful destination for us to enjoy our holiday together.
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Viena
is regarded
as the City of Music
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because
of its musical legacy and the historic
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centre
of Vienna is rich in architectural ensembles, grand buildings, monuments and parks.
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Plenty
of spectacular cultures is within easy reach in this city and I wish to be there again and witness a city revered by all.

We can enjoy the music film festival on City Hall Square, stroll and taste food in a magical surrounding, visit the
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Schönbrunn
Zoo, the oldest zoo in the world, take a tour to the
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Ringstrasse
by a tram, do
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some
shopping and be in a city which
is considered
one of the best livable
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cities
in the world. I had been there
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only
for a couple of days and my experience was fabulous.

I am quite
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positive
all of us will enjoy our time in this city during our trip. Would like to know your thoughts about it.

Take care and stay fine.
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See
you
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soon
.

Yours
truly
,

Powell
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. v. 1

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  American English
8 paragraphs
245 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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