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You have recently brought a telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine showa you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most recent call is kept in the calls list. Write an e-mail letter to the store manager. In your letter- say who you are, explain the problem, say what action you would like the store to take.

You have recently brought a telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine showa you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most recent call is kept in the calls list. Write an e-mail letter to the store manager. In your letter- say who you are, explain the problem, say what action you would like the store to take. 566kN
Dear Sir, I am Joan, a new customer on your website. I am writing this letter to show my dissatisfaction related to a telephone along with anserwing machine which I purchased on 20 March, last week. Basically, what has happened is when I brought that product at home yesterday I found that it only keept the record of last call in list. However, your website provide information that respondent machine will display a list of messages and gave an option to select which one should be played first but it does not. I think there must me fault in the system due to the fact it was not working approprately. I was consequently exicted about this equipment on the contrary I am unhappy with this. It would thrill me if you could consider my problem and replace this machine in the near future. I expact this situation to be resolved in a timely manner. I look forward to hearing from you. Your SincerelyJoan
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the record of last call in list.
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be played
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me fault in the system due to the fact it was not working
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approprately
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exicted
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I am unhappy with this. It would thrill me if you could consider my problem and replace this machine in the near future. I
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expact
this situation to
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in a timely manner. I look forward to hearing from you. Your
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SincerelyJoan
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IELTS letter You have recently brought a telephone with answer machine from an online shop. The web page said that the answer machine showa you a list of who left a message so you can choose which to play first. But after taking it home you find out that only the most recent call is kept in the calls list. Write an e-mail letter to the store manager. In your letter- say who you are, explain the problem, say what action you would like the store to take.

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