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buying a new product from a shop

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Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing to inquire about an electronic product that I want to buy from your shop. I wonder if you have a coffee machine available at your store as I need the machine with many options which prepare various types of coffee such as, Late and Mocha. I would like to know also the price for the coffee machine and it would be very cooperative if you send me all the products that you have, that match my requirements, with the prices so I can compare all the items together, besides informing me with the payment method whether by cash or credit card because I want to know the easiest method for purchasing your products. I believe that you the option for delivery of your products. If you will deliver the product to me, please mention the total fees for delivery to my location at ALBarsha, Dubai. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Paula Raafat

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing to inquire about an electronic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
 that I want to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 from your shop. I wonder if you have a coffee machine available at your store as I need the machine with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 options which prepare various types of coffee such as, Late and Mocha.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 would like to know also
 the price for the coffee machine and it would be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 cooperative if you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 me all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
 that you have, that match my requirements, with the prices This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 I can compare all the items together, besides
 informing me with the payment method whether by cash or credit card This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I want to know the easiest method for purchasing your products.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 believe that you the option for delivery of your You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
. If you Consider removing 'will'. (Usually, 'will' does not occur in a conditional clause, unless in the sense 'want to' or 'be willing to'.)deliver
will deliver
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
 to me, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 mention the total fees for delivery to my location at Possible spelling mistake found.AlaskaAlbertaAlbaniaAltarsMarshaAlisha
ALBarsha
, Dubai.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely
,

Paula Possible spelling mistake found.RAAFRaftArafatRabatAFATNAAFA
Raafat