Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v.2

You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my disappointment with the induction stove that I purchased from your shop a couple of days ago. I found it in working condition initially, but then after a few hours of use, it malfunctioned. I contacted your shop and was assured a quick solution but nothing has been done since then. I am hoping you would replace it with a fresh one immediately. I was very excited to purchase it but disappointed to find that it had manufacturing flaws. While using the stove, I tried to increase the operating temperature. But I could not do so and it takes a much longer time than needed to cook anything. I am distressed that the sole purpose for its purchase failed and I ended up purchasing a faulty product. The invoice number is 254107 and I am attaching the receipt with this letter. I called the customer care officer of your store but he failed to propose any solution despite his assurance. It would be great if you could replace my faulty induction stove with a new one since it has a valid warranty for two years. I think this matter deserves your attention and so address this problem immediately. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Nivetha Kumar
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my disappointment with the induction stove that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
from your shop a couple of days ago. I found it in working condition
initially
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
then after a few hours of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, it malfunctioned.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
contacted your shop and
was assured
a quick solution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
nothing has
been done
since then.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am hoping you would replace it with a fresh one immediately.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
excited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
disappointed to find that it had manufacturing flaws. While using the stove, I tried to increase the operating temperature.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I could not do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
and it takes a much longer time than needed to cook anything. I
am distressed
that the sole purpose for its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
failed and I ended up purchasing a faulty product. The invoice number is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
254107 and
I am attaching the receipt with this letter. I called the customer care officer of your store
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
he failed to propose any solution despite his assurance.

It would be great if you could replace my faulty induction stove with a new one since it has a valid warranty for two years. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
this matter deserves your attention and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
address this problem immediately.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Nivetha
Kumar
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts