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You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v.3

You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my utter disappointment regarding the food factory device that I purchased from your shop a few days ago. I was very excited to purchase this kitchen appliance but disappointed to find that it was poorly made and has a manufacturing flaw. I visited your shop on 4th November and purchased a brand new Philips food factory that comes with two years warranty. However, to my sheer astonishment, when I unwrapped the box and tried to run the device, it did not work. I thoroughly checked all the connections as the problem could have been on my end but this was not the case. Immediately, I called the shop and complained about the faulty product. I also provided all the details the person on the other side of the phone requested. He assured me that a company representative will be visiting me in a couple of days and replace the product. But this has never proved to be true. The order number is 8541203 and I am attaching a copy of my receipt. I urge you to immediately address the issue and replace the faulty product with a new and fresh one. Yours faithfully, Mubashir Noorani
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my utter disappointment regarding the food factory device that I
purchased
from your shop a few days ago. I was
very
excited to
purchase
this kitchen appliance
but
disappointed to find that it was
poorly
made and has a manufacturing flaw.

I
visited your shop on 4th November and
purchased
a
brand new
Philips food factory that
comes
with two years warranty.
However
, to my sheer astonishment, when I unwrapped the box and tried to run the device, it did not work. I
thoroughly
checked
all the connections as the problem could have been on my
end
but
this was not the case. Immediately, I called the shop and complained about the faulty product. I
also
provided all the
details
the person on the other side of the phone requested. He assured me that a
company
representative will be visiting me in a couple of days and replace the product.
But
this has never proved to be true. The order number is
8541203 and
I am attaching a copy of my receipt.

I urge you to immediately address the issue and replace the faulty product with a new and fresh one.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mubashir
Noorani
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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