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You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v.1

You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apologise as I will not be able to present myself for the interview which is scheduled for on the second week of November. My project manager will be out of the country during this time and I will have to manage the team during his absence. I am hoping that you would be kind enough to reschedule the interview sometime in December. I am eagerly waiting to meet you in a formal interview and discuss my potential for the post of Executive Manager. However, my project manager called me yesterday to notify me that he will be in Canada from 15th to 25th November. He asked me to look after the project during his absence. Therefore I will be incapable to attend the interview as planned. I would request you to postpone the interview date to a later date - preferably in December. This would allow me enough time to complete my tasks and be available for the interview. I aspire to work in your esteemed organisation and hoping to get a chance. I look forward to getting a favourable reply from you soon. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Jessica Jeremy
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
as I will not be able to present myself for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
which
is scheduled
for on the second week of November. My project manager will be out of the country during this time and I will
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have to
manage the team during his absence. I am hoping that you would be kind
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to reschedule the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
sometime in December.

I am
eagerly
waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in a formal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
and discuss my potential for the post of Executive Manager.
However
, my project manager called me yesterday to notify me that he will be in Canada from 15th to 25th November. He asked me to look after the project during his absence.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
I will be incapable to attend the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
as planned.

I would request you to postpone the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
date to a later date
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
preferably
in December. This would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time to complete my tasks and be available for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interview
. I aspire to work in your esteemed
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
and hoping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a chance.

I look forward to getting a
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourable' is British English.
favourable
reply from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jessica Jeremy
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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