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You have recently been selected by a company. A friend of yours works on the same profile in a different organisation. Write a letter to your friend seeking advice about your work. In the letter describe the work profile. Ask what advice do you want. say how he is the best person to take advice from

You have recently been selected by a company. A friend of yours works on the same profile in a different organisation. Write a letter to your friend seeking advice about your work. In the letter describe the work profile. Ask what advice do you want. say how he is the best person to take advice from E3jKL
Hi Ben, It has been a long time indeed since we have been in touch. I hope this letter finds you in the pink of health. I am elated to let you know that I have been hired by Motorola for the position of ‘Regional Sales Head’. Moreover, I have been offered a better package compared to my previous company with a 50% hike. I remember you telling me about your role as a Regional Sales head for Intel and how challenging it has been for you to meet your targets. As you now know, I would be handling a similar position and although our experience has been in different companies, I am sure your intellect and expertise can help me in making a presentation. After a month of relentless hard work, I need to submit a report depicting the diagrammatic comparative study of the monthly targets. Undeniably, presentations are not my cup of tea. Besides, I am well aware of your proficiency in making effective presentations. Therefore, I require your help and guidance in presenting an impactful report. I am sure you will take some time out from your busy schedule and help me sail through this presentation. Yours truly, Daisy Shah
Hi Ben,

It has been a long time
indeed
since we have been in touch. I hope this letter finds you in the pink of health. I
am elated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I have
been hired
by Motorola for the position of ‘Regional Sales Head’.
Moreover
, I have
been offered
a better package compared to my previous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
with a 50% hike.

I remember you telling me about your role as a Regional Sales head for Intel and how challenging it has been for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
your targets. As you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
know, I would be handling a similar position and although our experience has been in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, I am sure your intellect and expertise can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in making a presentation.

After a month of relentless
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work, I need to submit a report depicting the diagrammatic comparative study of the monthly targets.
Undeniably
, presentations are not my cup of tea.
Besides
, I am well aware of your proficiency in making effective presentations.
Therefore
, I require your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
and guidance in presenting an impactful report.

I am sure you will take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time out from your busy schedule and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me sail through this presentation.

Yours
truly
,

Daisy Shah

IELTS letter You have recently been selected by a company. A friend of yours works on the same profile in a different organisation. Write a letter to your friend seeking advice about your work. In the letter describe the work profile. Ask what advice do you want. say how he is the best person to take advice from

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  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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