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a journal entry from Stanley’s point of view.

a journal entry from Stanley’s point of view. JqA86

Hi, so today I going to write my journal. On the bus, I need to sit with the guard, and in front of me is the driver. We are sitting on the bus without the air conditioner. The land is hot, I can see few tents and building far away. I meet Mr. Sir and he teaches a rule at the Camp Green Lake is do not upset the Warden. Then Mr. Pendanski introduced me to the campers. They include X-ray, Squid, Armpit, Zero, … I asked Theodore (Armpit), ” Uhm. . . Theodore, do you know where I can fill my canteen? ”. Then, he grabs my collar and yell “MY NAME IS ARMPIT NOT THEODORE, okay? ” Then I takes a swift shower with cold water. At the dinner, I eats a disgusting food FOEVERRRRRRR. The other camper come around me and asked me what happened, and why I need go to Camo Green Lake. I tell them that the shoes was from the sky dropped down, I do not know why I got it. It is not FAULT, I am innocent, Bu. . u…but no one believe me. It is why I need to go here. All off the campers in here may know about the yellow spotted lizard. It is too dang-er-rous. They can be up to twenty in one hole. The yellow spotted lizard eat the shell off the sunflower. Uhm… let me remember, they got red eyes, the black teeth, and the long white tongue. The next day, I see the room sign Wreck room. All the things in the room are break; the game machine, the TV, and the sofas. Like all of it is torn or break. I write to my mother a letter. All the words in it are lies, I do not want my mom to worry about me. In my letter have this, ” Once I pass the swimming test, I'll get to learn how to water-ski. ” Actually, I need to dig the holes, and it was pretty tired. While digging the hole, I found the fish fossil, I think that I can rest the day of. But when I gave it to Mr. Pendanski. He do not accept that. Other boys come around me and they seem amused Mr. Pen-dance key asked the campers about their future. Zig Zag want to be the job related to the animal, and I give the ideas that he can be a training animal for movies.

Hi, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
Did you mean "I'm going", "I am going", or "I was going"?I'm goingI am goingI was going
I going
 to write my journal. On the bus, I You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to sit with the guard, and in front of me is the driver. We are sitting on the bus without the air conditioner. The land is hot, I can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 few tents and building far away.

I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 Mr. Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).Sir, and
Sir and
 he teaches a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirement
rule
 at the Camp Green Lake is Consider using a past participle here: "done".done
do
 not upset the Warden. Then Mr. Possible spelling mistake found.PendantPendantsPolanskiPenmanship
Pendanski
 introduced me to the campers. They include X-ray, Squid, Armpit, Zero, … I asked Theodore (Armpit), Don't put a space on both sides of a quote symbolapply
” 
Possible spelling mistake found.UHFUmOhmUhUAMChm
Uhm
. Don't put a space before the full stop.
.
Don't put a space before the full stop.
.
 Theodore, do you know where I can fill my canteen? ”. Then, he grabs my collar and yell

“MY NAME IS ARMPIT NOT THEODORE, okay? ”

Then I The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "take"take
takes
 a swift shower with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chillyfrosty
cold
 water. At the dinner, I The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "eat"eat
eats
 a disgusting food Possible spelling mistake found.
FOEVERRRRRRR
. The other camper This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 around me and asked me what happened, and why I You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 go to Camo Green Lake. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 them that the shoes was from the sky This phrase is redundant. Consider using "dropped".dropped
dropped down
, I do not know why I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 it. It is not FAULT, I am innocent, Make sure that 'Bu' is an abbreviation (bureau, bushel). Did you mean "by", "but", "bug", or "bus"?ByButBugBus
Bu
. Don't put a space before the full stop.
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterU
u
…This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 no one believe me. It is why I You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to go here.

All off the campers in here may know about the yellow spotted lizard. It is too Possible spelling mistake found.dangerous
dang-er-rous
. They can be up to twenty in one hole. The yellow spotted lizard eat the shell off the sunflower. Possible spelling mistake found.UHFUmOhmUhUAMChm
Uhm
… This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me remember, they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 red eyes, the black teeth, and the long white tongue.

The next
 day, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 the room This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :indication
sign
 Wreck room. All the things in the room are break; the game machine, the TV, and the sofas. Like all of it is torn
 or break. I write to my mother a letter. All the words in it are lies, I do not want my mom to worry about me. In my letter have this, Don't put a space on both sides of a quote symbolapply
” 
Once I pass the swimming This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evaluate
test
, I'll This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 to learn how to water-ski. ” Actually, I You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to dig the holes, and it was pretty tired.

While digging the hole, I found the fish fossil, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that I can rest the day of. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 when I gave it to Mr. Possible spelling mistake found.PendantPendantsPolanskiPenmanship
Pendanski
. He The pronoun 'He' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "does", "did".doesdid
do
 not accept that. Other boys This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 around me and they seem Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphamused.amused!amused?amused:amused,amused;
amused


Mr. Pen-dance key asked the campers about their future. Possible spelling mistake found.BigDigGigPigRigFig
Zig
Possible spelling mistake found.TagBagGagLagRagHag
Zag
 want to be the job related to the animal, and I give the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
ideas
 that he can be a training animal for movies. 