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You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board.

You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. JdBB
Dear Mr. Walker, I am writing this letter to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager. Which I have seen recently on the university's notice board. Currently, I am studying on M. B. A program at the Loren Brusque University, graduating in 2020. I am studying the subjects that are relevant to this job post. Moreover, I am having exposure in other management skills by taking various additional courses. During my studies, I was working in one of the reputed company. Where I have learnt managerial skills, communication skills and I use to interact with various foreign clients. As a team leader, I gained a valuable experience for the post of Quality Assurance Manager. Which I feel would be better fit for this position. I am looking forward to hear from you and exciting to work with you. Thank you for consideration of my application. Yours Sincerely, Rishav Mittal
Dear Mr. Walker, I am writing this letter to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
recently on the university's notice board.
Currently
, I am studying on M. B. A program at the Loren Brusque University, graduating in 2020. I am studying the subjects that are relevant to this job post.
Moreover
, I am having exposure in other management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
by taking various additional courses. During my studies, I was working in one of the reputed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. Where I have
Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.
learnt
managerial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and I
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
interact with various foreign clients. As a team leader, I gained a valuable experience for the post of Quality Assurance Manager. Which I feel would be better fit for this position. I am looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you and exciting to work with you. Thank you for consideration of my application. Yours
Sincerely
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Rishav
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Mittal

IELTS letter You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board.

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