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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter - describe the item - explain where and when you left it - say what action you would like the company to take.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to confirm that I have misplaced my mobile phone while I was traveling by train from Sydney to Brisbane on 31st of July in the first train of morning at 7. 00 am. I was seating in compartment number 1 and my seat number was 36. My journey was very smooth and I did not had any issue with my path, I had a good sleep and after waking up I ordered a coffee, once I reached the destination, I came out of the station and went to my home. While watching television on my couch I wanted to call my wife and inform her to bring the groceries and looked for my cell phone, but could not find it. I started searching for the same and no where it was found. I then realized that I had kept the device below the seat. I would request you to kindly find the phone for me and update me on 0566987129 so I can come and get the same. Regards, Deepak Waja
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to confirm that I have misplaced my mobile phone while I was traveling by train from Sydney to Brisbane on 31st of July in the
first
train of morning at 7. 00 am. I was seating in compartment number 1 and my seat number was 36.

My journey was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
smooth and I did not
The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: "have"
had
any issue with my path, I had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
sleep and after waking up I ordered a coffee, once I reached the destination, I came out of the station and went to my home.

While watching television on my couch I wanted to call my wife and inform her to bring the groceries and looked for my cell phone,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
could not find it. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
searching for the same and
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
where it
was found
. I then realized that I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
the device below the seat.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would request you to kindly find the phone for me and update me on 0566987129
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the same.

Regards,

Deepak
Possible spelling mistake found.
Waja

IELTS letter You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter - describe the item - explain where and when you left it - say what action you would like the company to take.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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