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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...............,

Dear max, Hope you are doing well. I m glad that finally you are taking off from your hectic schedule by choosing to spend time in shimla I guarantee this camping holiday would be an outstanding experience for you as one is going to enjoy local beauty and breathtaking mountain views. Be sure to take a warm jacket and snow shoes to protect yourself from cold winds which seems to be a drawback. Thinking of the experience of camping always rejuvenate my mind with cherishing memories which I had taken from shimla last year and really want to experience again. Somehow my boss has given me an important work of office on which I have been working day and night. The reason, I would not be able to join as a company with you. Let me know your experience after finishing this venture and don't forget to take snaps along side huge mountains. Yours loving, Jaspreet
Dear max,

Hope you are doing well.
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I m
glad that
finally
you are taking off from your hectic schedule by choosing to spend time in
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
shimla


I guarantee this camping holiday would be an outstanding
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experience
for you as one is going to enjoy local beauty and breathtaking mountain views. Be sure to take a warm jacket and snow shoes to protect yourself from
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cold
winds which seems to be a drawback.

Thinking of the
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experience
of camping always rejuvenate my mind with cherishing memories which I had taken from
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shimla
last year and
really
want to
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experience
again. Somehow my boss has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me an
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important
work of office on which I have been working day and night. The reason, I would not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
with you.

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Let
me know your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
after finishing this venture and don't forget to take snaps
Did you mean "alongside"?
along side
huge mountains.

Yours loving,

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Jaspreet

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/she has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ,

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  American English
7 paragraphs
155 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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