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You Have Just Returned From A Conference And Want To Give A Presentation To Your Colleagues

You Have Just Returned From A Conference And Want To Give A Presentation To Your Colleagues 8dE9x
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest in giving a presentation to share the business ideas and strategies which I learned from the seminar I attended last week. The meeting was based on planning and budgeting. Professionals and experts from international corporations participated in the seminar and they compared accounting and financial sheets of different companies. Also, they highlighted various strategies to increase revenue by eliminating unnecessary expenses. I would like to give a brief presentation to our company’s employees. This would help our workers to ascertain where we are standing today and where we are planning to reach in the future. Furthermore, I want to suggest some ideas to reduce the average cost of goods and I want to highlight valuable action plans which would help workers to work effectively and efficiently. Thank you for your consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Hadiya Abdurahmonova
Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my interest in giving a presentation to share the business
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ideas
and strategies which I learned from the seminar I attended last week. The meeting
was based
on planning and budgeting. Professionals and experts from international corporations participated in the
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seminar and
they compared accounting and financial sheets of
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different
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companies
.
Also
, they highlighted various strategies to increase revenue by eliminating unnecessary expenses.

I would like to give a brief presentation to our
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company
’s employees. This would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
our workers to ascertain where we are standing
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today
and where we are planning to reach in the future.
Furthermore
, I want to suggest
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some
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ideas
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the average cost of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and I want to highlight valuable action plans which would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
workers to work
effectively
and
efficiently
.

Thank you for your consideration.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hadiya
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Abdurahmonova
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IELTS letter You Have Just Returned From A Conference And Want To Give A Presentation To Your Colleagues

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  American English
7 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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