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A letter to former teacher.

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Dear Mrs Kuprinenko, I hope you are doing well. Did you receive my last letter? I was excited to write you about my achievements as fresher and now I am a sophomore so I have a lot of news. First of all I should share with you that I was transferred from commerce to budget and I will receive a scholarship. I'm so excited about it. Now I can see that all my efforts paid off. Also I am doing my best in a new subjects. Now we are sophomores so we have to do more homework, different projects, speak English better and more fluently that in a previous year. All girls in my group work hard so most teachers praise us. I notice my progress in English, for example I read not adaptive texts easier than before or I can watch foreign films without subtitles. Finally, there are two things that I would like to ask you. How are you doing with the new class? Are they noisy and inquisitive or calm and disciplined? More study load or less? Has the renovation of the assembly hall finished? I heard that a fence was put up around the school. How are things with school security now? Is it getting better? Thank you once again for your letter, I am looking forward to meeting you in Januar. Best wishes, Diana Negoda
Dear Mrs
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Kuprinenko
,

I hope you are doing well. Did you receive my last letter? I
was excited
to write you about my achievements as fresher and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
now
I am a sophomore
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
news.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
I should share with you that I
was transferred
from commerce to budget and I will receive a scholarship. I'm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
excited about it.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Now
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that all my efforts paid off.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
I am doing my best in a new
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "subject"?
subjects
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Now
we are sophomores
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do more homework,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
projects, speak English better and more
fluently
that in a previous year. All girls in my group work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
most teachers praise us. I notice my progress in English,
for example
I read not adaptive texts easier than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
or I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
foreign films without subtitles.

Finally
, there are two things that I would like to ask you. How are you doing with the new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
? Are they noisy and inquisitive or calm and disciplined? More study load or less? Has the renovation of the assembly hall finished? I heard that a fence
was put
up around the school. How are things with school security
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
now
? Is it getting better?

Thank you once again for your letter, I am looking forward to meeting you in
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Januar
.

Best wishes, Diana
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Negoda
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IELTS letter A letter to former teacher.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
229 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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