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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation 85Mpk
Dear sir, Hi my name is Saarthi Pandey, I just read your magazine published on 12 march 2019, 120th edition in which article was mentioned about the 5 most attractive places in Ireland. One of them honorary mention was of my county Galway. In that subsection, by mistake your editor Mr. Kim lee wrote incorrect geographical location and mentioned that it’s in south of Galway but it’s at upper north side. In tourist excursions he forgot to mention the heart of county salt hill and cliffs of Oranmore which plays an important role in enhancing the beauty. Secondly, National university of Ireland holds 249th rank in QS world ranking, he was mistaken with the rank of GMIT college which is 1249. According to me there must be proper research is important for the destination you are publishing. Otherwise, purpose to make aware people won’t be possible and they will find magazine a proper source of information. This may affect to your number of circulations and selling number drastically. So, I suggest you to involve a team of writers if one of them is inexperienced or not having expertise at that topic. Kind regards, Saarthi
Dear sir,

Hi my name is
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Saarthi
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Pandey
, I
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read your magazine published on 12
The month "March" needs to be capitalized.
march
2019, 120th edition in which article was
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mentioned about the
5 most attractive places in Ireland. One of them honorary mention was of my county Galway. In that subsection, by mistake your editor Mr. Kim lee wrote incorrect geographical location and mentioned that it’s in south of Galway
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but
it’s at upper north side. In tourist excursions he forgot to mention the heart of county salt hill and cliffs of
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Oranmore
which plays an
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important
role in enhancing the beauty.

Secondly
, National university of Ireland holds 249th rank in QS world ranking, he
was mistaken
with the rank of
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GMIT
college which is 1249.
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According to me
there
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must
be proper research is
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important
for the destination you are publishing.
Otherwise
, purpose to
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make
aware
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people
won’t be
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possible and
they will find magazine a proper source of information. This may affect to your number of circulations and selling number
drastically
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I suggest you to involve a team of writers if one of them
is inexperienced
or not having expertise at that topic.

Kind regards,

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Saarthi

IELTS letter You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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