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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour.

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. RNN6Y
Dear Ms. Selena, Hi! I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to tell you about the party that I am going to throw onto my birthday this Sunday. My name is Musti and I am your next-door neighbour. I recently moved here alone because my job is in this area. I regret that I did not get to acquainted with you. I am planning to throw a party this Sunday for my friends. My friend's birthday is coming this Sunday and we have decided to crash on my new home. The party will commence at 8: 00 pm and it will continue till midnight. It will consist of music and we are going to dance. The dinner will be served around 10 pm and I am afraid the noises from the music might disturb you. I wanted to invite you face to face but I thought it would be inappropriate so I decide to write a letter. I invite you to join my party. This way, we will also get to know each other very well. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely,
Dear Ms. Selena,

Hi! I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to
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tell
you about the
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party
that I am going to throw onto my birthday this Sunday.

My name is
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Musti and
I am your
next
-door
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neighbour
. I recently
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moved
here alone
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because
my job is in this area. I regret that I did not
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get
to acquainted with you.
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I
am planning to throw a
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party
this Sunday for my friends.

My friend's birthday is coming this
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Sunday and
we have decided to crash on my new home. The
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party
will commence at 8: 00 pm and it will continue till midnight. It will consist of
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music and
we are going to dance. The dinner will
be served
around 10
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pm and
I am afraid the noises from the music might disturb you.

I wanted to invite you face to face
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but
I
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thought
it would be inappropriate
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so
I decide to write a letter. I invite you to
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join
my
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party
. This way, we will
also
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get
to know each other
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very
well.

Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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