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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia XGGkE
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Dana Zeitouni. I have seen your announcement on the local Australian magazine and I'm writing this letter in regards to the position you have offered. I would really appreciate accepting me to look after your beloved kid because, I adore children and enjoy taking care of them, plus I am a traveler who knows how to adapt with different cultures and societies. As I said before the love I have for kids had always encouraged me to study their very behaviors which gains me an excellent life experience as it has reflected on my job as a baby-sitter for more than six families, whom were very grateful for my performance. In addition, I'm patient, tidy and hard worker. That is why I think I am a suitable candidate. If I had the chance to live with you I would spend my free time trying new local Australian food, and of course visit the tourist attractions. Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Feel free to contact me for any further details. Yours sincerely, Dana Zeitouni
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Dana
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different
cultures and societies.

As I said
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before
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love
I have for kids had always encouraged me to study their
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behaviors which gains me an excellent life experience as it has reflected on my job as a baby-sitter for more than six families, whom were
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very
grateful for my performance.
In addition
, I'm patient, tidy and
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hard
worker.
That is
why I
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think
I am a suitable candidate.

If I had the chance to
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live
with
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you
I would spend my free time trying new local Australian food, and
of course
visit the tourist attractions.

Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Feel free to contact me for any
further
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details
. Yours
sincerely
, Dana
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Zeitouni
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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4 paragraphs
182 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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