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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. She has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. in your letter explain why your friend will enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. She has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. in your letter explain why your friend will enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer. NrrdN
Dear Maria, How are you darling? Sorry it took me a while to respond to your last letter, I was extremely busy with work, kids and just life in general. A camping holiday is such a great idea! The kids enjoy the outdoors so much and keep asking for more. I really think you're gonna a have a blast, it's a great opportunity to have some quality time with your family without TV and phones and get in touch with nature. Firstly, I highly recommend you arrive as early in morning as possible so you may find a good spot to camp. The best place to open up your tent is under a big tree and near the river or near the bathroom according to your needs or prefrences. The river bank will be awesome entertainment for the kids, but may also be a bit dangerous if your kids are not careful enough, so make sure to choose it only if you completely trust your kids to not enter the water without adult supervision. If you're not sure, choose the closest location to the bathroom, so you won't need to walk too much to the toilet or to cleanup your dishes after a meal. Secondly, even though a camping trip can be so much fun, it also has some downsides, such as muskitos and other bugs, lack of food and drinking water resources and of course, minimal to none electrcity resources - so make sure to come prepared with relevant equipment such as betteries, planty of canned food or tools to make food etc. Lastly, please et me know the exact dates you plan to go on your trip, we'd love to join you if the dates suits us. If you need any other advice feel free to call me! I'll be happy to help! XOXO, Maayan
Dear Maria,

How are you darling?

Sorry it took me a while to respond to your last letter, I was
extremely
busy with work,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
and
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just
life
in general
.

A camping holiday is such a great
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idea
! The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
enjoy the outdoors
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so
much and
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keep
asking for more.

I
really
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think
you're gonna a have a blast, it's a great opportunity to have
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some
quality time with your family without TV and phones and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in touch with nature.

Firstly
, I
highly
recommend you arrive as early in morning as possible
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so
you may find a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
spot to camp.

The best place to open up your tent is under a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
tree and near the river or near the bathroom according to your needs or
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prefrences
.

The river bank will be awesome entertainment for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
,
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but
may
also
be a bit
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dangerous
if your
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kids
are not careful
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enough
,
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so
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make
sure to choose it
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only
if you completely trust your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
to not enter the water without adult supervision.

If you're not sure, choose the closest location to the bathroom,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you won't need to walk too much to the toilet or to
Did you mean the phrasal verb "clean up" instead of the noun 'cleanup'?
cleanup
your dishes after a meal.

Secondly
,
even though
a camping trip can be
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so
much fun, it
also
has
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some
downsides, such as
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muskitos
and other bugs, lack of food and drinking water resources and
of course
, minimal to none
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electrcity
resources
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
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so
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make
sure to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
prepared with relevant equipment such as
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betteries
,
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planty
of canned food or tools to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
food etc.

Lastly
,
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please
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et
me know the exact dates you plan to go on your trip, we'd
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you if the dates suits us.

If you need any other advice feel free to call me! I'll be happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
!

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XOXO
,

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Maayan
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IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. She has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend. in your letter explain why your friend will enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

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  American English
14 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
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