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You have just got a job in Ho Chi Minh City, and, of course, you are rather pleased. However, you need to know certain things. You have no idea: ✓How to join the health service scheme ✓Where would you live? ✓How to arrange your annual holidays Write a letter requesting these instructions and directions

You have just got a job in Ho Chi Minh City, and, of course, you are rather pleased. However, you need to know certain things. You have no idea: ✓How to join the health service scheme ✓Where would you live? ✓How to arrange your annual holidays Write a letter requesting these instructions and directions oxQoq
Dear Sir or Madam, I have just got a job in Ho Chi Minh city. I need to know certain things so I am writing this letter to ask for further information of my job as well the company. Firstly, I would be grateful if you tell me how to join the health service scheme such as: Will the company register me or do i have to do it myself? Secondly, I do not have a place to live in Ho Chi Minh city now. Could you please let me know if your company has dormitory or apartment for employees? And how much do I have to pay to live there? Finally, I would like to know to how to arrange my annual holiday. How many vacations in a year and does the company organize anything? I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Nguyet.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have
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a job in
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Ho Chi Minh city
. I need to know certain things
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I am writing this letter to
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ask for
further
information of my job
as well
the
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company
.

Firstly
, I would be grateful if you
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tell
me how to
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join
the health service scheme such as: Will the
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company
register me or do
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i
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have to
do it myself?
Secondly
, I do not have a place to
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live
in
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Ho Chi Minh city
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now
. Could you
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please
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let
me know if your
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company
has dormitory or apartment for employees? And how much do I
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have to
pay to
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live
there?

Finally
, I would like to know to how to arrange my annual holiday. How
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many
vacations in a year and does the
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company
organize anything?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Nguyet
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IELTS letter You have just got a job in Ho Chi Minh City, and, of course, you are rather pleased. However, you need to know certain things. You have no idea: ✓How to join the health service scheme ✓Where would you live? ✓How to arrange your annual holidays Write a letter requesting these instructions and directions

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  American English
7 paragraphs
146 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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