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you have friend one of the colleges in this city who lives in acity abroad. You would like to study at colleges in this city. write a letter to your friend asking for advice

you have friend one of the colleges in this city who lives in acity abroad. You would like to study at colleges in this city. write a letter to your friend asking for advice ebmjx
Dear friend AnnI am writing to ask if you could help me with how to choose one appropriete college. As you know I am 16 years old. I am interested in chemistry. I want to be a doctor. So I would study foreign countries. Because many famous professors teach and live there. I want to learn from them. Would you mind offering me some advice about how to choose a college? I have heard about a lot of colleges but I have some difficulties to choose one of them. You have been living there for ages and you have enough information about there. Which college is correspond for me? If you send me list of colleges I will choose better one. Thank you for taking the time to read this letter. you are my best friend and I hope you will help me. i look forward to receiving your advice. Your sincerely Lola
Dear friend
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AnnI
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing to ask if you could
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help
me with how to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
one
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appropriete
college.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you know I am 16 years
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old
. I
am interested
in chemistry. I want to be a doctor.
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So
I would study foreign countries.
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Because
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many
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famous
professors teach and
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live
there. I want to learn from them. Would you mind offering me
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some
advice about how to
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choose
a college? I have heard about
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a lot of
colleges
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but
I have
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some
difficulties to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
one of them. You have been living there for ages and you have
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enough
information about there. Which college is
Consider using a past participle here: "corresponded".
correspond
for me?
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me list of colleges I will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choose
better one. Thank you for taking the time to read this letter.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
you
are my best friend and I hope you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me.
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
look forward to receiving your advice. Your
sincerely
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Lola
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IELTS letter you have friend one of the colleges in this city who lives in acity abroad. You would like to study at colleges in this city. write a letter to your friend asking for advice

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
152 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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