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You have decided your current employment

You have decided your current employment 8aLdr
Dear Mr Jonson. I am writing to inform you about my leaving current workplace. I have been working there for two years and I have learned how to work with young minds consequently, I saw an advertisement about tutorial work in the local newspaper and I believe that this employment actually suitable for me. I am fun-loving, energetic with lots of enthusiasm and also a great sense of fun and intellect. I would like to exprement my own course which runs by myself. It demands me a high level of responsibility in everything I do and I should work extremely hard to get proper results from my students for their learning foriegn language and getting high IELTS scores. It takes me 7 - 8 hours to work with adolsens in a day so that I will not have enough time to go to school which belong to the local area where I currently work. I have gained an excellent experience with working kids and learn how to attitude to each pupils individually. Moreover, I also have known how to solve problems independently and of course, to be honest when assign to children's knowledge. I consider it is a relevant step in the beginning of my career. I thank you for your deep attention to my willings and I look forward to recieving your reply. Yours sincerely Mrs Jessica.
Dear Mr Jonson. I am writing to inform you about my leaving
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current
workplace. I have been working there for two years and I have learned how to
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work
with young minds
consequently
, I
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saw
an advertisement about tutorial
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work
in the local newspaper and I believe that this employment actually suitable for me.
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I
am fun-loving, energetic with lots of enthusiasm and
also
a great sense of fun and intellect.
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I
would like to
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exprement
my
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own
course which runs by myself. It demands me a high level of responsibility in everything I do and I should
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work
extremely
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hard
to
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get
proper results from my students for their learning
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foriegn
language and getting high IELTS scores. It takes me
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7 - 8
hours to
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work
with
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adolsens
in a day
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so
that I will not have
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enough
time to go to school which belong to the local area where I
currently
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work
. I have gained an excellent experience with working kids and learn how to attitude to each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "pupil"?
pupils
individually
.
Moreover
, I
also
have known how to solve problems
independently
and
of course
, to be honest when assign to children's knowledge. I consider it is a relevant step in the beginning of my career. I thank you for your deep attention to my
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willings
and I look forward to
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recieving
your reply. Yours
sincerely
Mrs Jessica.
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IELTS letter You have decided your current employment

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
228 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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