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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.

You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. RROXM
dear sir or Madam, I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction a product which I purchased from your shop on 15 th of On 15 th of October I went to the shop, which is situated the centre of city Kokand “Digital”to buy camera for a birthday present. Shop assistant showed me some new, digital cameras and told their prices. I chose the last model which is high price. I wanted to run it but your employee did not want and refused my willing and persuaded me it works well. When I came I gave it to my son, however it did not work properly. The photo came out strangely. The colours were not good. I returned it to your shop 7 days ago, but I have not got it yet. To resolve the problem I would like you repair it or refund 50 dollar I paid. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. If I do not hear in 7 days I will file complaints with appropriate consumer agencies and consider my legal alternatives. I may be conducted by this telephone number 97 627 38 29 Your sincerely feya
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dear
sir or Madam, I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction a product which I
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purchased
from your
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shop
on
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15 th
of

On
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15 th
of October I went to the
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shop
, which
is situated
the
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centre
of city
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Kokand
“Digital
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”to
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buy
camera for a birthday present.
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Shop
assistant
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showed
me
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some
new, digital cameras and
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told
their prices. I chose the last model which is high price. I wanted to run it
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but
your employee did not want and refused my willing and persuaded me it works well. When I came I gave it to my son,
however
it did not work
properly
. The photo came out
strangely
. The
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colours
were not
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good
. I returned it to your
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shop
7 days ago,
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but
I have not
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got
it
yet
.

To resolve the problem I would like you repair it or refund 50
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dollar
I paid. I look forward to hearing from you as
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soon
as possible. If I do not hear in 7 days I will file complaints with appropriate consumer agencies and consider my legal alternatives. I may
be conducted
by this telephone number 97 627 38 29

Your
sincerely


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feya

IELTS letter You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.

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3 paragraphs
194 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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