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You have bought a camera from a overseas shop. However, some of the parts of the camera is missing from the box. Write a letter to the shop owner informing about it.

Dear Sir, I am Jane Jasper, and recently I have bought one camera from your shop along with an additional wide angle lens. Yesterday, I just opened the package containing the camera and other accessories. However, it seems some of the items that was supposed to be there are missing from the box. I bought a digital SLR camera, Panasonic Lumix 450 ES along with a wide angle lens (10-40mm) of the same brand. I found the camera inside the box, however, the wide angle lens and the charger of the battery were missing. I was a little astonished. I am now back in my own home country, and if you can find a way to send the part of the accessories along with the wide angle lens that will be great. You can send it via either some courier or through DHL post. I would in fact prefer the later one as it is quite reliable. Looking forward to hearing your response. Please find my personal phone number below for any further contact. Thank you, Sincerely, Jane Jasper. Phone: 56789024
Dear Sir,

I am Jane Jasper, and recently I have
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camera
from your shop along with an additional
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angle
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lens
. Yesterday, I
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opened the package containing the
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camera
and other accessories.
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some
of the items that
was supposed
to be there are missing from the box.

I
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bought
a digital SLR
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camera
, Panasonic
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450 ES along with a
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wide
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angle
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lens
(10
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-40mm
) of the same brand. I found the
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camera
inside the box,
however
, the
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wide
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angle
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lens
and the charger of the battery were missing.
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was a
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am
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now
back in my
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own
home country, and if you can find a way to
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send
the part of the accessories along with the
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wide
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angle
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lens
that will be great. You can
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send
it via either
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some
courier or through DHL post. I would in fact prefer the later one as it is quite reliable.

Looking forward to hearing your response.
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Please
find my personal phone number below for any
further
contact.

Thank you,

Sincerely
,

Jane Jasper.

Phone: 56789024
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IELTS letter You have bought a camera from a overseas shop. However, some of the parts of the camera is missing from the box. Write a letter to the shop owner informing about it.

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  American English
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180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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