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Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area.Mention about the current sport facilities available, what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced, how the new sports facilities should be a help for the people in your age group.

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to request extra sports facilities for adults residing in 23 Street Woodstock, London. I am Anna Wilson. I am a teacher by profession. I am living in Woodstock from past three years. There are multifarious local facilities that are available for community people such as hotels, parks, bars, religious places and library where they can spend their leisure time. I would like you to kindly expand local facilities by adding community gym and swimming club. Due to hectic schedule everyone is busy. People usually get time to rejuvenate their minds going gym or swimming that are far away. I would be helpful if we can have this facilities in our area. This will help improving citizens physical health and they will also get opportunity to interact with their local people which will increase social interaction. I would really appreciate if you consider this request. Looking forward for your response. Yours faithfully, Anna Wilson
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to request extra sports facilities for adults residing in 23 Street Woodstock, London.

I am Anna Wilson.
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I
am a teacher by profession.
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I
am living in Woodstock from past three years. There are multifarious local facilities that are available for community
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people
such as hotels, parks, bars, religious places and library where they can spend their leisure time.

I would like you to kindly expand local facilities by adding community gym and swimming club. Due to hectic schedule everyone is busy.
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People
usually
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get
time to rejuvenate their minds going gym or swimming that are far away. I would be helpful if we can have
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this
facilities in our area.

This will
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help
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improving
citizens physical
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health and
they will
also
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get
opportunity to interact with their local
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people
which will increase social interaction.

I would
really
appreciate if you consider this request.

Looking forward for your response.

Yours
faithfully
, Anna Wilson

IELTS letter Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. Mention about the current sport facilities available, what kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced, how the new sports facilities should be a help for the people in your age group.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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