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You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have

Dear Mr Smith, I am Anushia, participant of the 'Environment and pollution management' training programme that you are organising next month in London. As I am aware that you expect volunteers to organise the social events, I am writing this letter on that regard to express my interest. I have been involved in many voluntary works since my college days and have extensive experience in organising such events. In my office, I am often responsible to plan important events, coordinate with the event management team, facilitate the guest lecturers and ensure conducting successful meetings. I enjoy playing such roles and I am quite confident that I would be the right person for your social event as well. I need to know some extra information about the events to be conducted. Hence I request you to send me more details regarding the training session and your plan for it so that I can start contributing right away. My participant ID is SEL-087 and you can check my profile before selecting me as an organiser. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thanks in advance. Yours Faithfully Anushia R K
Dear Mr Smith,

I am
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Anushia
, participant of the 'Environment and pollution management' training
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programme
that you are
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organising
next
month in London. As I am aware that you
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expect
volunteers to
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organise
the social
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events
, I am writing this letter on that regard to express my interest.

I have
been involved
in
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many
voluntary works since my college days and have extensive experience in
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organising
such
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events
. In my office, I am
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often
responsible to plan
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important
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events
, coordinate with the
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event
management team, facilitate the guest lecturers and ensure conducting successful meetings. I enjoy playing such
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roles and
I am quite confident that I would be the right person for your social
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event
as well
.

I need to know
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some
extra information about the
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events
to
be conducted
.
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Hence
I request you to
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send
me more
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details
regarding the training session and your plan for it
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so
that I can
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start
contributing right away. My participant ID is SEL-087 and you can
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check
my profile
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before
selecting me as an
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organiser
.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
. Thanks in advance.

Yours
Faithfully


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Anushia
R K

IELTS letter You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have

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