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You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there.

You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. LramV
Dear Chris, I am writing to ask you for some information that will help me make a decision. I have recently been offered a job in Seattle. I am very much interested in the job, but, as you know, I have never visited Seattle. I am not sure whether I would like to live there. Since you have lived there for a while, I thought you could answer some questions for me. One thing I am worried about is the weather. I have heard that it rains in Seattle all the time. Is this true? It sounds very depressing. I have also heard that Seattle is a growing city, and I am afraid it would feel very crowded to me. I have never lived in a big city before. Another thing I wonder about is leisure activities. I like going out dancing a lot. Are there good places to go dancing in Seattle? What about music? I would not want to live in a place where I could not go to concerts frequently. Another important issue is housing. I have heard that Seattle is very expensive. Is it hard to find a nice apartment at a reasonable rent? What neighborhoods would you recommend? I appreciate you taking the time to answer my questions, and I look forward to hearing from you. If I decide to accept the job in Seattle, then I hope we will be able to get together frequently. Best wishes, Miranda
Dear Chris,

I am writing to ask you for
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some
information that will
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help
me
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make
a decision. I have recently
been offered
a job in Seattle.
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I
am
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very
much interested in the job,
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but
, as you know, I have never visited Seattle.
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I
am not sure whether I would like to
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live
there. Since you have
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lived
there for a while, I
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thought
you could answer
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some
questions for me.

One thing I
am worried
about is the weather. I have heard that it rains in Seattle all the time. Is this true? It sounds
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very
depressing. I have
also
heard that Seattle is a growing city, and I am afraid it would feel
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very
crowded to me. I have never
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lived
in a
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big
city
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before
. Another thing I wonder about is leisure activities. I like going out dancing a lot. Are there
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good
places to go dancing in Seattle? What about music? I would not want to
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live
in a place where I could not go to concerts
frequently
.

Another
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important
issue is housing. I have heard that Seattle is
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very
expensive. Is it
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hard
to find a nice apartment at a reasonable rent? What neighborhoods would you recommend?

I appreciate you taking the time to answer my questions, and I look forward to hearing from you. If I decide to accept the job in Seattle, then I hope we will be able to
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get
together
frequently
.

Best wishes, Miranda

IELTS letter You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
243 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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