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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date.

You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date. 9g03
Dear Sir/Madam, This letter is in regard to the job offer your organisation has send start from 15th May next Saturday. I would like to express my gratitude and joy for becoming an part of your company. I was already informed that the position I am appointed for is senior psychologist who will be working with the executive employees. Unfortunately, it will be difficult for me to join from 15th May. As my parents are elderly citizen who need to be looked after by a caretaker. Arranging for any custodian is not possible on such a short notice. Hence I would like to request you to extend my notice period from 7 days to 14 days. I would be able to report to the office physically on 27th May without any cognitive conflict. Employing the attender would not take long but the procedure of licence registration will be an obstacle. Hoping for an positive response. kind regards, H. F
Dear Sir/Madam,

This letter is in regard to the job offer your
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
has
Use past participle here: "sent".
send
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
from 15th May
next
Saturday.

I would like to express my gratitude and joy for becoming
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
part of your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I was already informed that the position I
am appointed
for is senior psychologist who will be working with the executive employees.

Unfortunately, it will be difficult for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
from 15th May. As my parents are elderly citizen who need to
be looked
after by a caretaker. Arranging for any custodian is not possible on such a short notice.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
I would like to request you to extend my notice period from 7 days to 14 days. I would be able to report to the office
physically
on 27th May without any cognitive conflict. Employing the attender would not take long
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the procedure of
Possible spelling mistake. 'licence' is British English.
licence
registration will be an obstacle.

Hoping for
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
kind
regards,

H. F

IELTS letter You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. You have been offered a job, asking you to start next week. You want the job very much but, because of a previous commitment, you want to delay the start for another two weeks. Write to the Manager, accepting the job, but explaining your situation and asking for the change to your start date.