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Replacement of electrical device

Replacement of electrical device Nepj

Dear sir, I have purchased an iron box from your company one week back. It was worked in good condition for one week. But from yesterday it is not working properly. As I communicated with customer services many times but they are are not giving positive response from there end. Its almost 25 days I raised this issue through mail to customer complaint mail id. I did not get any reply from there end also. This is very essential device in our daily life. So finally I am requesting you to please reply this product with new piece as soon as possible.

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company
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get
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please
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IELTS letter Replacement of electrical device

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

102 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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