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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v.3

You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v. 3
Dear Mr Hudson, I am Elizabeth Beth, your tenant in the apartment D1-5. I am writing to notify you of the unbearable noise the new tenant of D1-3 is making which I have endured for the last couple of days with patience. I am hoping that you would talk to this neighbour and settle the issue. I consider myself lucky to have some great neighbours and never complained to you about any disturbance. However, the new resident on D1-3 is making life tough for me. They moved in two weeks ago and I am already forced to write you this complaint letter. They have parties almost every day and listen to music with loud volume. I go to bed at around 10. 30 pm only to wake up again by the loud noise from their flat. I am not sure if this is something I should mention but the family members have nasty quarrels and they do not keep it inside their house. I live with a teenage daughter and a husband who are equally agitated. I think it would be inappropriate for me to personally intervein and that is why relying on you for a solution. You should talk to other tenants of floor D and get to know what really is happening. You have the authority to talk to the tenant of D1-3 and try to solve the problem. Otherwise, I would be forced to shift to a new residence. Expecting your cooperation in this regards. Yours sincerely, Elizabeth Beth
Dear Mr Hudson,

I am Elizabeth Beth, your
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tenant
in the apartment D1-5. I am writing to notify you of the unbearable noise the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tenant
of D1-3 is making which I have endured for the last couple of days with patience.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am hoping that you would talk to this
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neighbour
and settle the issue.

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I
consider myself lucky to have
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some
great
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neighbours
and never complained to you about any disturbance.
However
, the new resident on D1-3 is making life tough for me. They
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moved
in two weeks
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ago and
I am already forced to write you this complaint letter. They have parties almost every day and listen to music with loud volume. I go to bed at around 10. 30 pm
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to wake up again by the loud noise from their flat. I am not sure if this is something I should mention
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but
the family members have nasty
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quarrels and
they do not
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keep
it inside their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. I
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live
with a teenage daughter and a husband who are
equally
agitated.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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think
it would be inappropriate for me to
personally
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intervein
and
that is
why relying on you for a solution. You should talk to other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tenants
of floor D and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know what
really
is happening. You have the authority to talk to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tenant
of D1-3 and try to solve the problem.
Otherwise
, I would
be forced
to shift to a new residence.

Expecting your cooperation in
Did you mean "these"?
this
regards.

Yours
sincerely
,

Elizabeth Beth
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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