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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v.4

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v. 4
Dear Julia, It is so good to hear from you again after such a long time. Besides, I am also very excited that you have decided to visit my country on a two-week holiday and I won't miss the opportunity to meet you during that time. Well, let me tell you what you should know before coming to my country. First of all, my country is never as cold as yours. So, you don’t really need to bring much winter clothes of yours. Besides, renting taxis in my country would be a bit too expensive for your liking, and therefore, it would be better for you to commute by public bus. Then, it would also be important for you to know that renting hotel rooms in my city would be a bit more expensive than the usual since the demand for the hotel rooms would be too high at the time you arrive because of the holiday season. So, I have decided to book your room in a nice hostel for bachelor people where the cost is reasonable. I am sure you will like the accommodation arrangement and the surrounding views. Anyway, I guess, I have given you all the necessary information for a comfortable holiday stay. But, if you need any more information, please feel free to ask anytime. Warm wishes, Natasha
Dear Julia,

It is
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so
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good
to hear from you again after such a long time.
Besides
, I am
also
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very
excited that you have decided to visit my
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country
on a two-week holiday and I won't miss the opportunity to
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meet
you during that time.

Well,
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let
me
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tell
you what you should know
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before
coming to my
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country
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, my
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country
is never as
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cold
as
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yours
.
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So
, you don’t
really
need to bring much winter clothes of
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yours
.
Besides
, renting taxis in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
would be a bit too expensive for your liking, and
therefore
, it would be better for you to commute by public bus. Then, it would
also
be
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important
for you to know that renting hotel rooms in my city would be a bit more expensive than the usual since the demand for the hotel rooms would be too high at the time you arrive
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because
of the holiday season.
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So
, I have decided to book your room in a nice hostel for bachelor
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people
where the cost is reasonable. I am sure you will like the accommodation arrangement and the surrounding views.

Anyway, I guess, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
you all the necessary information for a comfortable holiday stay.
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But
, if you need any more information,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
feel free to ask anytime.

Warm wishes,

Natasha
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS letter An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
222 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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