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You have been going to a piano teacher for the past month. However, it no longer fits in your budget or busy schedule Write a letter to your piano teacher. In your letter: Thank him for his efforts and time Explain the changes in your circumstances Explain that you may be able to pick it up again

You have been going to a piano teacher for the past month. However, it no longer fits in your budget or busy schedule Write a letter to your piano teacher. In your letter: Thank him for his efforts and time Explain the changes in your circumstances Explain that you may be able to pick it up again 15Ge7
Dear Mr Vittorio, I am writing to you to inform you that unfortunately, I will not be able to keep on piano lessons anymore because of my busy working schedule. First of all I want to express my appreciation for your patience, efforts and professional approach to me. You were my favourite piano teacher and every lesson I attended with great pleasure. At the end of each lesson, I was waiting for the next meeting. At my workplace I was promoted and now I am a head of the department. Therefore, I have numerous responsibilities and will not have free time for piano lessons. As you may know, it was my child's dream to learn to play piano so that after a while when I get used to my new position I will continue piano lessons without any doubt. I hope we will meet soon and we will play piano together again. Sincerely Yours, Anna
Dear Mr
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Vittorio
,

I am writing to you to inform you that unfortunately, I will not be able to
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on
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piano
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of my busy working schedule.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
I want to express my appreciation for your patience, efforts and professional approach to me. You were my
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favourite
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piano
teacher and every
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lesson
I attended with great pleasure. At the
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end
of each
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lesson
, I was waiting for the
next
meeting.

At my workplace I
was promoted
and
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now
I am a head of the department.
Therefore
, I have numerous responsibilities and will not have free time for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
piano
lessons.

As you may know, it was my child's dream to learn to play
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
piano
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so
that after a while when I
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get
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used
to my new position I will continue
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piano
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lessons
without any doubt.

I hope we will
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meet
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
soon and
we will play
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piano
together again.

Sincerely
Yours, Anna

IELTS letter You have been going to a piano teacher for the past month. However, it no longer fits in your budget or busy schedule Write a letter to your piano teacher. In your letter: Thank him for his efforts and time Explain the changes in your circumstances Explain that you may be able to pick it up again

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154 words
6.0
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