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Dear Sir/Madam, I am a 21-years-old student and I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am a 21-years-old student and I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St. Mary's University. I have been studying there for the past three years. I am writing to ask if there are any part-time job vacancies at your football club. I really enjoy sports, and my areas of particular interest and experience are Football, Rugby and Cricket. I have had some experience of coaching for these sports over the past three years that I have been at the University. Last year, I worked in the summer holidays at a football club in my home country. I will be able to provide references from this summer job and also from my teachers at the University. I would prefer to work in the evenings and at the weekends, as I have classes during daytime, and I can start from the beginning of December.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a 21-years-
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I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St. Mary's University. I have been studying there for the past three years.
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am writing to ask if there are any part-time job vacancies at your football club.

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I
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enjoy sports, and my areas of particular interest and experience are Football, Rugby and Cricket.
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have had
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experience of coaching for these sports over the past three years that I have been at the University. Last year, I worked in the summer holidays at a football club in my home country. I will be able to provide references from this summer job and
also
from my teachers at the University.

I would prefer to work in the evenings and at the weekends, as I have classes during daytime, and I can
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from the beginning of December.
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IELTS letter Dear Sir/Madam, I am a 21-years-old student and I am studying Sports Coaching Science at St.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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