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You and your co-worker often have lunch in a nearby park. However, there have been too many birds in the park lately, especially the pigeons who want your food. The situation is spoiling your lunch break.Describe the importance of the park to you and your colleagues. Explain how the birds have affected you. Suggest what the newspaper’s readers, or city officials and park managers, can do to improve the situation.

You and your co-worker often have lunch in a nearby park. However, there have been too many birds in the park lately, especially the pigeons who want your food. The situation is spoiling your lunch break. Describe the importance of the park to you and your colleagues. Explain how the birds have affected you. Suggest what the newspaper’s readers, or city officials and park managers, can do to improve the situation. 6xBax
Dear Reader I would make a light on the concern which me and follow facing in the nearby ground of our office building. Most of part of the this area, captured or covered by the bird litter and they are annoying us all the time by demanding the food. Everyday, when we have a break from the work we use this place to get meal together. in this way, we can discuss our social and work related problem and this situation, not only create strong bound between us but also give us a time to forget about office hectic. in my point of view, the problem is a big most of sitting bench are floored with the pigeon poo. its because of, there is tree over the sitting which present a best place to the feather ones to make nest. Also, when we open our lunch box bird surround us and start to chirping. To me, it looks like they are requesting food so I can not able to stop feeding my food to them. There is a number of things which we can do, first of all management just make sure nobody should be allowed to drop food to the flying ones. Even, they can draw signs over the crowd location or where most of birds seen. Regarding to it, if officials want need any kind of help and they want that we change our food location I am always happy to do that I will really thankful for reading this mail.
Dear Reader

I would
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make
a light on the concern which me and follow facing in the nearby ground of our office building.
Consider using "Most part" or "Most of the part".
Most of part
of
Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only "the" or "this" is left.
the this
area, captured or covered by the bird
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
litter and
they are annoying us all the time by demanding the food.

'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
Everyday
, when we have a break from the work we
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use
this place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
meal together.
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in
this way, we can discuss our social and work related problem and this situation, not
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only
create strong bound between us
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but
also
give us a time to forget about office hectic.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
in
my point of view, the problem is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
most of sitting bench
are floored
with the pigeon poo.
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
its
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because
of, there is tree over the sitting which present
Use "the" with the superlative.
a
best place to the feather ones to
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make
nest.
Also
, when we open our lunch box bird surround us and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to chirping. To me, it looks like they are requesting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
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so
I can not able to
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stop
feeding my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
to them.

There is a number of things which we can do,
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
first of all
management
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just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure nobody should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to drop
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
to the flying ones. Even, they can draw signs over the crowd location or where
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the birds") or simply say "most birds".
most of birds
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seen
.
The phrase 'Regarding to' is not correct. Use "Regarding" or "regard to".
Regarding to
it, if officials want need any kind of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
help and
they
Did you mean "want us to"?
want that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
location I am always happy to do that

I will
really
thankful for reading this mail.
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IELTS letter You and your co-worker often have lunch in a nearby park. However, there have been too many birds in the park lately, especially the pigeons who want your food. The situation is spoiling your lunch break. Describe the importance of the park to you and your colleagues. Explain how the birds have affected you. Suggest what the newspaper’s readers, or city officials and park managers, can do to improve the situation.

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