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Reflect on your experience at IQanat High School of Burabay.

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Hello everyone, my name is Muhan and I would like to tell about changes with my life this year. It was 9 months ago when I was just an ordinary guy who didn't have any plans or goals for the future. Because my old school didn't have any teachers. Moreover, I hated some subjects and I was humble and introverted person. But in one day I was informed that I entered the new school which named IQanat High School of Burabay. From that moment, something changes in me. Then I came here with my new schoolmates. I thought "Wow, wear a beautiful school, like in America, I hope the teachers will be great too". As expected, teachers are cool. Besides, they always help students. To be honest, it's not hard to understand that time is flying very quickly, almost one academic year has passed since the school year. At this time I learned many especially soft skills. I learned how to be a confident person, how to be better and the main soft skills which I learned it is right time allocation for tasks. In terms of academic performance, my English performance has improved significantly. I still remember the quarantine when I came to school. We were given on English test and it was difficult for me to do it. Besides, I had very poor speaking and listening. As for writing, that is awful. But thanks to the help of Sapar teacher and my desire to go to the B group. Then I finally upgraded my English level. I assume that everyone should study more and always get motivation from theirs goals to gain results as posible as they can. I'm an ambitious person so I want more. Consequently, I would like to spend time instead of relaxing on improving my English. Well, if I am lucky, I will prepare for the IELTS and UNT. I think that is all what I would like to tell for you.
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Muhan
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my
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school
didn't have any
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, I hated
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subjects and
I was humble and introverted person.
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in one day I
was informed
that I entered the new
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which named
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IQanat
High
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of
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Burabay
. From that moment, something
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changes
in me.

Then I came here with my new schoolmates. I
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thought
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Wow, wear a
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school
, like in America, I hope the
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will be great too
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. As
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are cool.
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students.

To be honest, it's not
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to understand that
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is flying
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quickly
, almost one academic year has passed since the
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year. At this
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I learned
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especially
soft
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skills
. I learned how to be a confident person, how to be better and the main soft
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which I learned it is right
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time
allocation for tasks.

In terms of academic performance, my English performance has
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improved
significantly
. I
still
remember the quarantine when I came to
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school
. We were
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on English
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and it was difficult for me to do it.
Besides
, I had
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poor speaking and listening. As for writing,
that is
awful.
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But
thanks to the
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help
of
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Sapar
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teacher
and my desire to go to the B group. Then I
finally
upgraded my English level.

I assume that everyone should study more and always
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get
motivation from theirs goals to gain results as
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posible
as they can. I'm an ambitious person
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so
I want more.
Consequently
, I would like to spend
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time
instead
of relaxing on improving my English. Well, if I am lucky, I will prepare for the IELTS and UNT. I
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think
that is
all what I would like to
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IELTS letter Reflect on your experience at IQanat High School of Burabay.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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