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You have been asked to write a report for an international research company about the nature and quality of advertising in your country.

Dear Mr. Roberts, I am writing in response to your letter inviting fair comments on the proposed changes to the club and/or alternative suggestions to the benefit of both individual and long-standing members. To begin with, the greatest value of the Warden Park and Fitness Club should not be underestimated. Incredible as it may seem, it is its extensive facilities and duly qualified staff that assist people in beating stress, fighting tiredness, and boosting immunity. What I consider to be highly inappropriate is the purchase of some extra equipment. It is essential that current members have enough space for they can make the best use of the time spent in the club. A more useful alternative should be to recruit extra instructors so a greater variety of classes can be offered to the members. Secondly, building of a second sauna in the area adjacent to the swimming pool is, undoubtedly, a worthwhile idea. However, other concerns must be brought to the fore, namely extending changing room next to the pool in such a way that it would fit all the members. Finally, it is unlikely that a new wide screen TV and broadcasting Global Sports Channel would redound to the advantage of the club members. Better cooking facilities for snack bar, however, can make a significant difference. To sum up, any steps taken to secure improvement in the club are deemed to be beneficial to either side. Thus, I firmly believe that my alternative suggestions would not go unnoticed. I am looking forward to witnessing actual improvements. Yours sincerely,
Dear Mr. Roberts,

I am writing in response to your letter inviting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
comments on the proposed
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changes
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
and/or alternative suggestions to the benefit of both individual and long-standing members.

To
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begin
with, the greatest value of the Warden Park and Fitness
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Club
should not
be underestimated
. Incredible as it may seem, it is its extensive facilities and
duly
qualified staff that assist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in beating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
, fighting tiredness, and boosting immunity. What I consider to be
highly
inappropriate is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extra equipment. It is essential that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
members have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
space for they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the best
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of the time spent in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
. A more useful alternative should be to recruit extra instructors
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
a greater variety of classes can
be offered
to the members.

Secondly
, building of a second sauna in the area adjacent to the swimming pool is,
undoubtedly
, a worthwhile
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
.
However
, other concerns
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be brought
to the fore,
namely
extending changing room
next
to the pool in such a way that it would fit all the members.

Finally
, it is unlikely that a new wide screen TV and broadcasting Global Sports Channel would redound to the advantage of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
members. Better cooking facilities for snack bar,
however
, can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a significant difference.

To sum up, any steps taken to secure improvement in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
club
are deemed
to be beneficial to either side.
Thus
, I
firmly
believe that my alternative suggestions would not go unnoticed.

I am looking forward to witnessing actual improvements.

Yours
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You have been asked to write a report for an international research company about the nature and quality of advertising in your country.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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