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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring your attention to a difficulty I have been forced to confront due to the current sharing arrangement of my college room. I share room 702 at South college building with my roommate Daniel Frances. I am so sorry to let you know that ever since David moved in last Summer I have not been deprived of peaceful enjoyment of college room. To put it bluntly, we have very incompatible individual behaviors and I find it very hard to adjust to some of his routines which I consider very disruptive by any standard. While I agree that I'm required to adapt to compromise to a reasonable extent when living in shared accommodation, what I have to put up with is by no means reasonable. David stays up all night and plays loud music which is very disturbing to both my sleep as well as my studies. I have a hard time trying to concentrate when he is in the room as he makes phone calls moving up and down the room. Although I have very politely told him that I need to focus on my studies he is oblivious to the fact that the room is for both of us. What really tipped the scale for me is that he has no regard to hygiene. He does not follow the cleaning procedures as advised by the management. This is especially dangerous behaviour especialyy during the current pandemic. Also, I have noticed food leftovers lying around his section of the room making the room smell very unpleasant. In addition to that, he smokes inside the room while I am out for my work or lectures and I find ash remaining on top of furniture in the living area of the room. I have talked to him and explained a couple of times however I have not seen any improvement in his behavior. Therefore, as the last resort I am informing you hoping you will understand my concerns and suggest an immediate solution for it. I would prefer a single room where I would not have to share even if comes at the cost of transferring to another college. Trust you would address this issue at your earliest. Yours sincerely
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to bring your attention to a difficulty I have
been forced
to confront due to the
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current
sharing arrangement of my college room.

I share
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room
702 at South college building with my roommate Daniel Frances.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
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so
sorry to
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let
you know that ever since David
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moved
in last Summer I have not
been deprived
of peaceful enjoyment of college
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room
. To put it
bluntly
, we have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
incompatible individual behaviors and I find it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to adjust to
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some
of his routines which I consider
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very
disruptive by any standard.

While I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that I'm required to adapt to compromise to a reasonable extent when living in shared accommodation, what I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
put up with is by no means reasonable. David stays up all night and plays loud music which is
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very
disturbing to both my sleep
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as well as
my studies. I have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
time trying to concentrate when he is in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
as he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
phone calls moving up and down the room.

Although I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
politely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him that I need to focus on my studies he is oblivious to the fact that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
is for both of us. What
really
tipped the scale for me is that he has no regard to hygiene. He does not follow the cleaning procedures as advised by the management. This is
especially
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dangerous
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behaviour
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especialyy
during the
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current
pandemic.
Also
, I have noticed food leftovers lying around his section of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
smell
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
unpleasant.
In addition
to that, he smokes inside the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
while I am out for my work or lectures and I find ash remaining on top of furniture in the living area of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
. I have talked to him and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
a couple of times
however
I have not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
any improvement in his behavior.

Therefore
, as the last resort I am informing you hoping you will understand my concerns and suggest an immediate solution for it. I would prefer a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
where I would not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
share even if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
at the cost of transferring to another college.

Trust you would address this issue at your earliest.

Yours
sincerely
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
375 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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