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You have a lost a item on holiday. Where it was .

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Dear sir/madam, I am writing to inform you that the most precious item of my life had been lost in Chandigarh while i was gone with my family on holiday. I would like to tell you about my most valuable item was a camera of Cannon Company. I bought it form Patiala a 1 year ago in cost rs 40000. I have all the bills and receipts of the camra. it was a 20 resolution with brown cover. Last week i was gone whole family in Rock garden, Chandigarh on winter vacations. Where we had had a coffe in a restaurant. When we arrived our next station, i realized that something missing in my hand then i saw my camera was not in my hand. So here i am entitled you please tell me the all process of taken insurance, which paper i have submitted so that i will buy Again it soon. I hope you will recieve my request as soon as possible. Your faithfully Gursimran
Dear sir/madam,

I am writing to inform you that the most precious item of my life had
been lost
in Chandigarh while
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was
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gone with
my family on holiday.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about my most valuable item was a camera of Cannon
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Company
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
it form
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Patiala
a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "1-year"
1 year
ago in cost rs 40000.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have all the bills and receipts of the
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camra
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
it
was a 20 resolution with brown cover.

Last week
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was gone
whole family in Rock garden, Chandigarh on winter vacations.
“Where” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Where
we had had a
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coffe
in a restaurant. When we arrived our
next
station,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
realized that something missing in my hand then
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
my camera was not in my hand.

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So
here
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i
am entitled
you
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please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me the all process of taken insurance, which paper
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have submitted
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so
that
Did you mean "I"?
i
will
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buy
Again it
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soon
.

I hope you will
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recieve
my request as
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soon
as possible.

Your
faithfully


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Gursimran

IELTS letter You have a lost a item on holiday. Where it was.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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