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There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park.

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Dear Sir/Madam, Good day! My name is Paul David resident here in our village and I am writing to request your good office for reconsideration regarding the selling of the park. The Park is so important for all the residents living here in our vicinity so it is a huge loss for us if this place will be diminished. There are some benefits that you need to know maybe you might reconsider the decision or think about it again. First, the park is so helpful to our youths, they can do sport activities like basketball, soccer and etc. with this way they will be more active in some community activities. Unlike if the park will be vanished there is a possibility that they may be involved in a bad habits like using illegal drugs. Continued use might be a result of insecurities with them or a desire of social acceptance. Families use this site as a picnic area or some occasions that they can have spare time with the members of the family. Parks are a tangible reflection of the quantity of life in a community. Park also can provide identity for residents and area major fortune in the perception of quality life in a given community. As I can see parks are often cited as one of the most important places in the community. If you will pursue this decision the residents here in our village will be force to do a protest against your administration. Sincerely, Paul David

Dear Sir/Madam,

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Sincerely
,

Paul David