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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. awE8V
Dear Miss. Salma, I hope my emile finds you will! . I am writing this email to inform you that I will not be abele to continue the Kickboxing course, you know how much i love kickboxing and how much I want to be a part-time coach. But the new role that I got it in IT department in Saudi Aramco company, that requiers me to go to Riyadh for more than one year and my manager told me today to take this trainning opportunities and how it wii this trainning affect on my career path. But as you know, that thier is nothing that can stop me to achieve my goals. I will buy the equipment that may I neet to continue trainning in my department, and I you to tell me from where shoud I buying for? . And if you know someone in Riyadh that can train me untill I back to train with you in Jeddah. Yours sincerely, Aisha Alhakeem
Dear Miss.
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Salma
,

I hope my
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emile
finds you will!
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.
I am writing this email to inform you that I will not be
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abele
to continue the Kickboxing course, you know how much
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
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love
kickboxing and how much I want to be a part-time coach.
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But
the new role that I
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got
it in IT department in Saudi Aramco
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company
, that
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requiers
me to go to Riyadh for more than one year and my manager
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told
me
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today
to take this
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trainning
opportunities and how it
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wii
this
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trainning
Did you mean "effect"?
affect
on my career path.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
as you know, that
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thier
is nothing that can
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stop
me to achieve my goals. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the equipment that may I
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neet
to continue
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trainning
in my department, and I you to
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tell
me from where
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shoud
Did you mean "I'm buying", "I am buying", or "I was buying"?
I buying
for?
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
And if you know someone in Riyadh that can train me
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untill
I back to train with you in
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Jeddah
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Aisha
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Alhakeem

IELTS letter You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course.

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  American English
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163 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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