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You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part time job while you are studying. so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job. suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part time job while you are studying. so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job. suggest how your friend could help you find a job. 6xdyl
Dear Ali, How are you doing? It's been a long time since we last met but we will see each other very soon as I'll be coming to your country for my masters degree and I need some help from you. I have received a 50% scholarship for my masters from University of Wales, UK. I will be flying at the end of this month and will be staying there for 2 whole years, as it's a 2 years program. Arrangements for my stay have already been made in the university hostel. I have planned to do some part-time work while being there so that I can bear my expenses later on. Because my family is not financially strong and I don't want to be a burden anymore. A Lot has been spent already. I am sending you my cv, please go through it and if you find any vacant position which is also paying good, then you can let me know and I will apply. Also, I want you to float my profile in your circle and ask them to help. I hope that you would help me in finding a well paid job. Take care, Mubashira Adeeb
Dear Ali,

How are you doing? It's been a long time since we last met
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we will
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see
each other
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very
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soon
as I'll be coming to your country for my
For an academic degree, use "master’s".
masters
degree and I need
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some
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help
from you.

I have received a 50% scholarship for my masters from University of Wales, UK. I will be flying at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this month and will be staying there for 2 whole years, as it's a 2 years program. Arrangements for my stay have already
been made
in the university hostel.

I have planned to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
part-time work while being there
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can bear my expenses later on.
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Because
my family is not
financially
strong and I don't want to be a burden anymore. A Lot has
been spent
already.

I am sending you my
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cv
,
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please
go through it and if you find any vacant position which is
also
paying
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
, then you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know and I will apply.
Also
, I want you to float my profile in your circle and ask them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

I hope that you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in finding a well paid job.

Take care,

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Mubashira
Adeeb

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part time job while you are studying. so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job. suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

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198 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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