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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses.

You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. 5gDN
Dear Mr. Luke, I am writing this letter in regards to the course I am studying as part-time course in evening at your campus. I am doing a full time job from 9 am to 5 pm at Telestra company which is located in west of the city. As you know I am also doing a part-time course of Advanced English in evening. I have realized it is very hard for me to be on time at campus because I finish my job at 5 pm and my evening class start at 5. 30 pm to 8. 30 pm. I work at the opposite side of where campus located. The distance from my work to the campus is 1 hour drive which makes impossible for me to be at campus on time. Moreover, the class over at 8. 30 pm therefore, I will arrive at home almost midnight. At last, I am financially not stable at this moment and thus I would not be able to leave this job. Due to my situation, I have decided not to continue this course any further. Please cancel my enrolment for this course. Yours sincerely, John
Dear Mr. Luke,

I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the
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course
I am studying as part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
in evening at your campus.

I am doing a full time job from 9 am to 5 pm at
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Telestra
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
which
is located
in west of the city.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you know I am
also
doing a part-time
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course
of Advanced English in evening.

I have realized it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for me to be on time at
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campus
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I finish my job at 5 pm and my evening
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
at 5. 30 pm to 8. 30 pm. I work at the opposite side of where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
located. The distance from my work to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
campus
is
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
1 hour
drive which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
impossible for me to be at
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campus
on time.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
over at 8. 30 pm
therefore
, I will arrive at home almost midnight. At last, I am
financially
not stable at this moment and
thus
I would not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
this job.

Due to my situation, I have decided not to continue this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
any
further
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
cancel my
Possible spelling mistake. 'enrolment' is British English.
enrolment
for this course.

Yours
sincerely
,

John

IELTS letter You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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