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You recently borrowed something from a friend for a party. During this party, this was damaged. Write a letter to this friend. In the letter: • Apologize to your friend • Explain how the damage happened • Say what you will do about the problem

You recently borrowed something from a friend for a party. During this party, this was damaged. Write a letter to this friend. In the letter: • Apologize to your friend • Explain how the damage happened • Say what you will do about the problem eWW7
Dear Dayo, I am sorry to write to you under this circumstance but I wanted to inform you about the damage to the gadget you lent me last week. I express my sincerest apologies to you for the damage to the lens of the GoPro Camera I borrowed from you. As you well know, the reason I decided to collect the camera from you was to capture and document my grandmother's 80th birthday celebration. Filming such a joyous occasion gives the family content to reminisce about in the future. I was in charge of capturing the event however, my presence was needed elsewhere as I was asked to pick up the birthday cake. As a result, I decided to hand over the camera to my cousin to continue filming in my absence as I didn't want to miss any moment. On returning, I found the lens of the camera slip in half. My cousin had slipped on a wet surface, consequently damaging the lens of the camera. In view of this, I intend to buy a new lens to replace the damaged one. However, it is rare to find the lens of the brand of your camera in Nigeria. Therefore, I will place an order for it to be imported to the country. This may take a minimum of 3 weeks, so please bear patience. Thank you for your generosity and consideration. Yours sincerely, Ola
Dear
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Dayo
,

I am sorry to write to you under this circumstance
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but
I wanted to inform you about the damage to the gadget you lent me last week.

I express my sincerest apologies to you for the damage to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lens
of the GoPro
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Camera
I borrowed from you. As you well know, the reason I decided to collect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
from you was to capture and document my grandmother's 80th birthday celebration. Filming such a joyous occasion gives the family content to reminisce about in the future.

I was in charge of capturing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
however
, my presence
was needed
elsewhere as I
was asked
to pick up the birthday cake.
As a result
, I decided to hand over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
to my cousin to continue filming in my absence as I didn't want to miss any moment. On returning, I found the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lens
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
slip in half. My cousin had slipped on a wet surface,
consequently
damaging the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lens
of the camera.

In view of this, I intend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lens
to replace the damaged one.
However
, it is rare to find the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lens
of the brand of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
in Nigeria.
Therefore
, I will place an order for it to
be imported
to the country. This may take a minimum of 3 weeks,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
bear patience.

Thank you for your generosity and consideration.

Yours
sincerely
,

Ola
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IELTS letter You recently borrowed something from a friend for a party. During this party, this was damaged. Write a letter to this friend. In the letter: • Apologize to your friend • Explain how the damage happened • Say what you will do about the problem

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  American English
8 paragraphs
234 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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