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You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

Dear Mr. Voller, I am writing to inform you about the possibility of me not attending your evening culinary course. I have recently interned at an international school as a full time job. As a result, I have to spend all day in my new work environment. A lot of work such as observing, making reports and planning for next lessons makes me always busy in the evenings. It is a best chance for me to study and gain experience in a professional work which can be valuable for my career prospects. If available, I would like to temporarily stop this course and restart after three months when I finish internship time. Therefore, I sincerely appreciate it if you could understand my situation and send me the opportunity that I could register as soon as I complete my work. I am looking forward to your response and continuing the course under your institution in the near future. Yours faithfully.

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IELTS letter You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

159 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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