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You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

Dear Mr. Voller, I am writing to inform you about the possibility of me not attending your evening culinary course. I have recently interned at an international school as a full time job. As a result, I have to spend all day in my new work environment. A lot of work such as observing, making reports and planning for next lessons makes me always busy in the evenings. It is a best chance for me to study and gain experience in a professional work which can be valuable for my career prospects. If available, I would like to temporarily stop this course and restart after three months when I finish internship time. Therefore, I sincerely appreciate it if you could understand my situation and send me the opportunity that I could register as soon as I complete my work. I am looking forward to your response and continuing the course under your institution in the near future. Yours faithfully.
Dear Mr.
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Voller
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I am writing to inform you about the possibility of me not attending your evening culinary course.

I have recently interned at an international school as a full time job.
As a result
, I
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have to
spend all day in my new work environment.
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A lot of
work such as observing, making reports and planning for
next
lessons
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makes
me always busy in the evenings. It is
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a
best chance for me to study and gain experience in a professional work which can be valuable for my career prospects.

If available, I would like to
temporarily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
this course and restart after three months when I finish internship time.
Therefore
, I
sincerely
appreciate it if you could understand my situation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the opportunity that I could register as
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soon
as I complete my work.

I am looking forward to your response and continuing the course under your institution in the near future.

Yours
faithfully
.
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IELTS letter You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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