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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Sir, My name is Smith and I'm a software engineer by profession, because my current company decided to post me to New Castle City, my family has to move with me. We will be moving on 5th September next month. My son who was studying at the local school in grade 5, will now need to enroll in another school. He's a brilliant at studies and got good grades in grade 4. He also takes part in extra curricular activities. He got 1st in 100 meters race and also make his team won the inter school soccer cup. With regards to studies his area of interest is computer sciences and wish to become a computer scientist in future. I saw the profile of your school and teachers. Honestly I'm quite impressed with the faculty and computer studies pattern that your school is adopting. So I really wish that you would allow my son to take admission in your school, so that he can continue his further studies in grade 5. I shall be very grateful. Waiting for your kind reply. Your's sincerely
Dear Sir,

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. He's a brilliant at
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4. He
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his team won
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his area of interest is computer sciences and wish to become a computer scientist
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I
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the profile of your
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pattern that your
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school
is adopting.
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wish that you would
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my son to take admission in your
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,
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that he can continue his
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5.

I shall be
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very
grateful. Waiting for your kind reply.

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IELTS letter Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

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5 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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