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You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

Dear Martin I have recently become aware of a course called Social Media Marketing Essentials and I am writing to ask for your support in taking this course. It is a five-day intensive program being offered by the Business Leadership Association and it starts on Monday 15 February. I believe the course would be of great benefit to our company as we have been recently considering how to build up our social media presence and attract more customers online. After reading reviews by former participants, I think this Social Media course will help me professionally in my capacity as Communications Manager and make a real difference to our company. For these reasons, I am requesting paid leave from 15-20 February to attend the course. It would be helpful if other team members did not take leave at this time; so far nobody else has applied. I believe this will not be a particularly busy time at work, but I am prepared to spend some time working on those evenings if needed. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes Neil MacFarlane
Dear Martin

I have recently become aware of a
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course
called Social Media Marketing
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Essentials and
I am writing to
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ask for
your support in taking this
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course
. It is a five-day intensive program
being offered
by the Business Leadership Association and it
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starts
on Monday 15 February. I believe the
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course
would be of great benefit to our
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company
as we have been recently considering how to build up our social media presence and attract more customers online. After reading reviews by former participants, I
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think
this Social Media
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course
will
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help
me
professionally
in my capacity as Communications Manager and
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make
a real difference to our
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company
.

For these reasons, I am requesting paid
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leave
from 15-20 February to attend the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. It would be helpful if other team members did not take
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leave
at this time;
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so
far nobody else has applied. I believe this will not be a
particularly
busy time at work,
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but
I
am prepared
to spend
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some
time working on those evenings if needed.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Best wishes

Neil
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MacFarlane

IELTS letter You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter give details of the course say how the course would be useful explain how the company could help you do this course.

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6.0
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