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You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. v.2

You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. v. 2
Dear Anila, Hope you are doing great and can write back to me about the things you have been doing these days. I would love to have you among us in India and this coming Republic Day is an excellent opportunity to enjoy a public holiday together. You can fly to India from Kuwait on 24th January and stay with us for a week or so. Last time you wrote to me that you have available paid vacations that you are planning to take. I think you should take it now and visit us. Republic Day, in India, honours the date on which the "Constitution of India" came into effect on 26 January 1950 replacing the Government of India Act (1935) as the governing document of India. On that day, we, as a nation, formally adopted the Constitution as the guiding document and became an independent republic! The main Republic Day celebration is held in the national capital, New Delhi, and this is an excellent opportunity to enjoy the national parade and show our respect. I also have several other plans for us. I will take you to my cousin's graduation day, which is on 29th January. On the 31st night, we will have a party where I will invite our common friends and welcome the new year. I am eagerly waiting to hear that you would be able to make it. With love and warm wishes, Diya
Dear
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Anila
,

Hope you are doing great and can write back to me about the things you have been doing these days. I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to have you among us in India and this coming Republic Day is an excellent opportunity to enjoy a public holiday together.

You can
fly
to India from Kuwait on 24th January and stay with us for a week or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
. Last time you wrote to me that you have available paid vacations that you are planning to take. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you should take it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
and visit us.

Republic Day, in India,
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honours
the date on which the
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Constitution of India
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
came into effect on 26 January 1950 replacing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
of India Act (1935) as the governing document of India. On that day, we, as a nation,
formally
adopted the Constitution as the guiding document and became an independent republic! The main Republic Day celebration
is held
in the national capital, New Delhi, and this is an excellent opportunity to enjoy the national parade and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
our respect.

I
also
have several other plans for us. I will take you to my cousin's graduation day, which is on 29th January. On the 31st night, we will have a party where I will invite our common friends and welcome the new year.

I am
eagerly
waiting to hear that you would be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and warm wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Diya
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in another country. Write a letter to this friend to visit you. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
237 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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