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You happened to witness a film being shot in your locality. Write a letter in 120-150 words to a friend describing your experience. You are Rani/Raman. 15. Vinay Nagar. Doty. ADS. 15. Vinay Nagar, Ooty.

You happened to witness a film being shot in your locality. Write a letter in 120-150 words to a friend describing your experience. You are Rani/Raman. 15. Vinay Nagar. Doty. ADS. 15. Vinay Nagar, Ooty. pRep0
Dear Doty, Hope you are doing well, it has been a while since i have heard from you. . As your are very passionate about technical aspects of movie making, I wanted to share my experience on witnessing a film being shot near my home. I wanted to come and share in person but my exams have kept me busy. The movie being shot was of action drama genre, akshay kumar and katrika were on lead roles. Akshay being my favorite actor I was on cloud nine when i saw him, and also I went and shook hands with him. Coming to the technical aspects, I was close to camera, the scene being shot was a action one, where hero jumped from a 2 feet tall strcuture made of concrete but for my surprise when replayed on camera the footage looked as if the hero jumped from a 10 ft building instead. Also the dress of actors and background dancers looked dull in reality but on camera they looked bright and very colorful. The instruments used for film making were huge, it included cameras, rolling machines, ladder like pickers, lightings etc.
Dear
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Doty
,

Hope you are doing well, it has been a while since
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i
have heard from you.
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.


As your are
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very
passionate about technical aspects of movie making, I wanted to share my experience on witnessing a film
being shot
near my home. I wanted to
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come
and share in person
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but
my exams have
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kept
me busy.

The movie
being shot
was of action drama genre,
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akshay
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kumar
and
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katrika
were on lead roles. Akshay being my favorite actor I was on cloud nine when
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i
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saw
him, and
also
I went and shook hands with him.

Coming to the technical aspects, I was close to
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camera
, the scene
being shot
was
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a
action one, where hero jumped from a
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2 feet
tall
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strcuture
made of concrete
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but
for my surprise when replayed on
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camera
the footage looked as if the hero jumped from a
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10 ft
building
instead
.
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Also
the dress of actors and background dancers looked dull in reality
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but
on
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camera
they looked bright and
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very
colorful.

The instruments
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used
for film making were huge, it included
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cameras
, rolling machines, ladder like pickers,
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lightings
etc.
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IELTS letter You happened to witness a film being shot in your locality. Write a letter in 120-150 words to a friend describing your experience. You are Rani/Raman. 15. Vinay Nagar. Doty. ADS. 15. Vinay Nagar, Ooty.

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6.0
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