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My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week.

My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week. dopb7
Dear Manager, My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week. I have working experience of 15 years with 5 years of relevant experience in finance domain. I have been instrumental into rolling out new processes as well as taking care of end to end need of small size setup. I have also earned several certification in finance field. I have got appreciation from different stakeholders to rollout a formal process. I have seen notice for vacancy yesterday only as I was on leave for a week before that. I see myself a suitable candidate for the job and would like to apply for it. And please let me know if more information is required from my end. My mail id is abc@gmail. com. I look forward to hear favorable response. Your sincerely, Peeyush Saxena
Dear Manager,

My name is
Possible spelling mistake found.
Peeyush
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Saxena and
I am a working as development manager in XYZ
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company
at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
which
was placed
on vacancy board last week.

I have working experience of 15 years with 5 years of relevant experience in finance domain. I have been instrumental into rolling out new processes
as well
as taking care of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
need of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
size setup.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have
also
earned
Possible agreement error. The noun certification seems to be countable; consider using: "several certifications".
several certification
in finance field.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have
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got
appreciation from
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different
stakeholders to rollout a formal process.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
notice for vacancy yesterday
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only
as I was on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for a week
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
myself a suitable candidate for the job and would like to apply for it. And
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please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if more information
is required
from my
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end
. My mail id is
Possible spelling mistake found.
abc@gmail
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
com
.

I look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
favorable response.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

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Peeyush
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Saxena

IELTS letter My name is Peeyush Saxena and I am a working as development manager in XYZ company at Gurgaon location. This mail is with regard to the opening of management role in your company which was placed on vacancy board last week.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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